If your novel has dual POV, like the one above, is it necessary to indicate this in the query? Recently I read that it’s best to present the query concisely from the POV of one character (the primary). If I do that, is it jarring to then mention that there are two viewpoints?
When I try to include both viewpoints in my pitch paragraph, it gets too wordy and bulky, though the alternating voices–one male and one female–are important to the book.
So I’ve been thinking about this for a few days now, and I’m not really sure I have a great answer. Dealing with multiple viewpoints is tricky.
I’ll start by saying, that I think whether the novel is written in first or third person makes a big difference. If you’re writing third, the issue of switching perspectives isn’t as big of a deal, because switching perspectives in third is a lot less jarring than it is in first person.
In first person, it’s more problematic. While thinking about this question, I went through my inbox and looked at all the queries that I’ve ever requested partials from. Only one had first person alternating point of view. This was mentioned in the query, though most of the query did seem to come more from the perspective of one character.
Another thing to consider is how the characters share page time within the story.POV may alternate, but how frequently? Does each character narrate the same number of chapters? Or is the story dominated by one character with bits from another character interspersed?
This will probably be an unsatisfying answer, but I’m not sure there really is a correct way to do this. I do think it’s something that needs to be considered. I also think that POV in the query letter is something to play around with. Maybe trying to write from two POV’s does make it too complicated, but you don’t know until you try. In other words, crank out as many versions of your query as possible, then sit down and consider which one works best for your story.